2. The feedback I took from my fellow peers and after going back and reviewing my pitch realized was spot on was that I was not showing enough enthusiasm in the pitch. I think in the beginning I was trying to make it more serious because my topic with seniors is serious but the ramp building is not. The ramps are what I am excited about and I tried to make that shine through this time. I found all of this feedback to be really helpful. I respect everyone in my group's opinion and take it to heart. We have discussed a lot through this semester so far and I have been gain a lot from any type of input I receive.
3.From the feedback besides what I discussed above is that I wanted this third pitch to sound much smoother. The first one was not worded exactly the way I wanted. I went back and make some corrections within my grammar and also when to add more emphasis on certain sentences. I've become more comfortable in front of the camera, and also from practice I have memorized most of my pitch.
Hey Garrett,
ReplyDeleteI found it super interesting the subject is something that I would love to do future research on. I Really love your passion for this subject it is such a great idea. After reading your article it hooked me and makes me want to get more information about it. Combining the subject together is a great way to widen your audience and make the most use out of it. I think that with this blog entry you really covered a lot and did the right things.
Hey Garett,
ReplyDeleteThis is a great post. Your pitch has defintely gotten better over the span of the summer. That is great that you are able tor receive feedback and then use it to make your pitch better. Good work
Hello Garret,
ReplyDeleteThis was a lovely post. Your pitch was fantastic and one of a kind. I thought you improved a bunch from your last pitch. I love you took the feedback and came back stronger than ever.
Hello Garett,
ReplyDeleteIt hard to make a sales pitch and it definitely puts me outside of my comfort zone. Presenting the speech is hard in itself but showing enthusiasm and having a smooth speech that addresses all aspects of the business is difficult. This past week was my first elevator pitch and I found it a lot more challenging than I expected it would be. I personally thought your pitch was good but I think it could have used more time actually explaining your product, like what materials did you offer? How long did they last compared to other ramps? and how does it compare to the competition.
Garett,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed how you were able to take the advice on your last blog post to better this one. I found that although you were discussing a serious topic, you showed the perfect amount of enthusiasm in your product. It was very well rehearsed and detailed. Good job.
Garrett,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed listening to your elevator pitch. You are dressed professionally and you spoke with great articulation and coherence. Of all the elevator pitches I've listened to in this class, this is certainly the best one! You also showed great enthusiasm for your business. I love how you took out your business card at the end of the video. Potential investors and partners would be impressed with your pitch. Also, great job keeping the pitch under 90 seconds. Perhaps you could've included an additional 20 or so seconds of information since the pitch was only 50 seconds long.